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"Hey," she asks, "do you have a moment?"
I turn around, giving nothing away but a slight indication of recognition – I know her cause before it slips from her lips. The signs are all the same and she catches me before I produce an excuse with a wave of her folder, and I'm bound by the part of me that doesn't want to feel bad for turning her down.
She carries on, words falling from her mouth like a clutter of recited text and I nod, eyes spilling where her hands guide me and I find myself lost in a plastic collection of papers, statistics, and reprinted images. She speaks about rights that the nameless children do not have, abuse hanging on the edge of her hurried tone like some sort of dead metaphor, falling into cerebral connection like a ten-piece puzzle sorting itself into place.
Suffering, they always say, pictures speaking thousands of words but losing meaning in numbers. I see what she wants me to see, though; the deprivation, the raw charm captured in a bright smile, the audacity captured through hopeful idealism in the sharp brown eyes of a nameless child. Or perhaps I tell myself that that is what she wants me to see, because underneath the layers of paper, underneath that unfamiliar flesh, I see everything that child might've appreciated in my stead.
In that image, I see my own fingers running through my hair, catching tangles where I last left them uncombed and wonder if it's worth the effort to undo something so meaningless – intricate by complexity, but so easily replaced. It's just a little tug followed by a sting, after all; nothing harsh like the blades I did not hold against my wrists, or the pills I did not gather once a month from my mother's new refills.
I tell myself, as I gaze into those eyes younger than mine, that suffering probably isn't the right word for me – not for that last heartbreak, not for that last mistake of words driven and arguments bred, not even for that string of colorful words that escaped from my father's lips. I can boast no bruises and scars, or pharmaceutical misuse, or even a life on the streets without someone to hold – my thoughts and textbooks are my inferior equivalent to the knives they craft to survive another day on streets they only know as home.
I feel insignificant because I do not bleed like they do. I only know the scattering of my emotions and what it is like to fall apart in my quiet corners, where nobody lends a shoulder, a smile.
I suddenly envy the children in the plastic folder; for there is nobody campaigning for me.
"So?" Her gaze gives nothing away, and I imagine that she's learned to expect something or nothing, for they are the only two answers she'll ever receive for her cause.
"I'm late for class," I say, breathing my tangent of a lie as I keep moving, my cause inevitably my own.
I turn around, giving nothing away but a slight indication of recognition – I know her cause before it slips from her lips. The signs are all the same and she catches me before I produce an excuse with a wave of her folder, and I'm bound by the part of me that doesn't want to feel bad for turning her down.
She carries on, words falling from her mouth like a clutter of recited text and I nod, eyes spilling where her hands guide me and I find myself lost in a plastic collection of papers, statistics, and reprinted images. She speaks about rights that the nameless children do not have, abuse hanging on the edge of her hurried tone like some sort of dead metaphor, falling into cerebral connection like a ten-piece puzzle sorting itself into place.
Suffering, they always say, pictures speaking thousands of words but losing meaning in numbers. I see what she wants me to see, though; the deprivation, the raw charm captured in a bright smile, the audacity captured through hopeful idealism in the sharp brown eyes of a nameless child. Or perhaps I tell myself that that is what she wants me to see, because underneath the layers of paper, underneath that unfamiliar flesh, I see everything that child might've appreciated in my stead.
In that image, I see my own fingers running through my hair, catching tangles where I last left them uncombed and wonder if it's worth the effort to undo something so meaningless – intricate by complexity, but so easily replaced. It's just a little tug followed by a sting, after all; nothing harsh like the blades I did not hold against my wrists, or the pills I did not gather once a month from my mother's new refills.
I tell myself, as I gaze into those eyes younger than mine, that suffering probably isn't the right word for me – not for that last heartbreak, not for that last mistake of words driven and arguments bred, not even for that string of colorful words that escaped from my father's lips. I can boast no bruises and scars, or pharmaceutical misuse, or even a life on the streets without someone to hold – my thoughts and textbooks are my inferior equivalent to the knives they craft to survive another day on streets they only know as home.
I feel insignificant because I do not bleed like they do. I only know the scattering of my emotions and what it is like to fall apart in my quiet corners, where nobody lends a shoulder, a smile.
I suddenly envy the children in the plastic folder; for there is nobody campaigning for me.
"So?" Her gaze gives nothing away, and I imagine that she's learned to expect something or nothing, for they are the only two answers she'll ever receive for her cause.
"I'm late for class," I say, breathing my tangent of a lie as I keep moving, my cause inevitably my own.
Literature
For the Encounters I Never Had
I released my regrets like a million balloons
chasing the sky with their bright round bodies --
wingless martyrs caught each tiny breath of air
and soared,
a moment of epiphany
when your rubbery skin punctures
and the soul escapes.
There is no element light enough to lift me away,
no instrument to sever the strings that earth
my tiny anklets --
I sway with the seasons
as if I am surrounded by an ocean,
unable to tread water fast enough to run,
nor find the reach to break the surface
where those regrets float momentarily,
winking in the sunlight before they coast away,
waiting for my realisation --
they pollute my conscience
Literature
...27...
She wore barbed wire necklaces so that every time she laughed, it hurt.
Little Freckles Frankie was the first to make her laugh so hard she bled. He was ten, she was eleven. I dont think he has found anything funny since. It was too bad really, baby blue eyes tend to twinkle when they laugh.
I caught her countin
Literature
things i have buried
batches of badly folded letters from my grandmother's
apartment, all tightly scrawled russian, smudged ink.
the luna moth my brother caught when i was seven,
its wings becoming a chartreuse stain on his palms.
the mark of every song that has ever made me feel,
each differently shaped and stitched together
to form the patchwork of resilience that is my heart.
sepia photographs, antiquated polaroids,
with nothing written in the white spaces
where stories of moments should be.
narrow granada streets, their uneven cobblestones
turned hazy with august's heavy heat;
the familiar taste of tears etched into frown lines
that i am too
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Congratulations on your win in the DLD Abuse contest!
This piece of prose captures many different elements and perspectives regarding abuse. Those multiple viewpoints coalesce into an overall statement about the campaigns of support, and the personal connections one has that are either intensified or relegated therein.
Firstly, you present the confrontation by a campaigner fighting on behalf of "suffering" children worldwide. This sometimes awkward exchange is one to which many of us can relate. In the first two full paragraphs, this campaigner has a vague and seemingly universal intent surrounded by abstraction. In the last sentence of that second full paragraph, however, the intent becomes more concrete; less nebulous.
Secondly, you show the internalisations present in the confronted--the emotional responses to the materials that the campaigner has forced into viewing and into, more macrocosmically, consciousness. This is a perspective that is simultaneously captivating and enlightening (though those two descriptors are certainly not mutually exclusive). You provide an insight into the protagonist's cognition--the neural and spiritual pathways through which this event is assimilated into his or her worldview.
Thirdly, you nicely provide the possible outcomes of the confrontation and show us which route the protagonist takes. By choosing the seemingly anticlimactic ending of walking away from the campaigner, one is left to assume the impact on both the aforementioned campaigner and the respondent. Did she feel rejected? If so, did she simply mark it as another tally on the list, or did she have a more personal pang as a result? How did the protagonist feel about having to instantaneously make the decision to either support this campaign or relegate it to the realm of unavoidable yet unsupported causes? How did this interpersonal interaction impact the rest of her day, and her thoughts about her own painful situations?
Though the piece is somewhat clumsy from a structural and syntactical perspective, the ambiguity and abstract nature of the topic and the intended impact necessitate such. You have succinctly relayed a microcosmic situation with connections to many grander, pertinent issues rooted outside a typical comfort zone for those in so-called "developed" nations.